Tuesday, April 8, 2008


Yesterday was definitely a Monday. Broke my stapler, spilled my coffee, and, yeah, yeah, yah, still plenty of waiting (huge sigh).

At least I don't have to wait for the Rockies to win again (FINALLY).

We signed a new client over the weekend. Remember the YA fantasy we requested the full for (even though we weren't looking at fantasy)? That's the one. Goes to show that a good piece of fiction will catch an agent's eye. Now we're working on making a great piece into a fantastic piece. Am excited with how it's shaping up thus far, excited to get it out there, not so excited about the months and months of waiting that will follow lol.

Thought I'd delve into show vs. tell a bit more (cuz, frankly, I feel like it, my little beasties).

Sensory imput is a great way to involve the reader in a story, infuse more life into your manuscript. A writer friend of mine once told me that he tries to engage at least 3 of the senses in the first 2 opening paragraphs of each chapter when he writes. Guess it works because he's on his sixth book to come out.

Here's a good example of show vs. tell and utilizing sensory input---


Marie lifted the glass nervously, brought it to her lips, and took a drink. It tasted sweet.

Pretty straight forward, sure, but this gives the reader nada, zip, zilch, to work from.


Marie's fingers trembled and twitched as she lifted the vial of green liquid to her lips. (GIVES US SIGHT AND A TOUCH OF COLOR)
A sweet smell, not unlike the aroma of cotton candy at the county fair, filled her nose. (SMELL)
She took a tentative sip. Warmth brushed across her tongue, ignited into an inferno as it slid down her throat. (TOUCH)

Not only does the second paragraph paint a more vivid picture using sensory input, but it also sets the tone, lets the reader know she's nervous about drinking whatever's in that glass.

Stay literate;)

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